omg i love it, is it supposed to be a song or just a poem bc if its a song you are recording it and emailing it to me k.

Your repetition is so well used! It gives this such a nice rhythm.

And I love the mention of the dance, because the more I read of it, the more your words sounded like a dance. I just really enjoyed the flow of it.

I like your word choice too. It complimented the style, more than anything. Like here:

Dance, baby, dance

Pirouette and twirl

Face to face

Boy and girl

And your italics were tastefully placed. It wasn't too much; it added the right amount of emphasis. ;)

-Katie, from the Review Marathon (link's in the profile!)

yay! this is a great song! it's so interesting and awesome! *jump up and down hyperly* yay! :)

My favorite lines were: "Dance, baby, dance/Pirouette and twirl/Face to face/Boy and girl" and I really could hear a tune to: "Cheater, lair, truth-defy-er" It really was giving an impacked on the whole song. Bottemline: I really liked it!