Wow, i thought the story was lush! Very well written, a great mix of description and dialogue, an interesting concept. In short, fantastic. I'm hoping for an update in the near future, although you could leave it as a one shot. Whatever you like.

Oh wow. I really really like it. When I read the summary, I wasn't sure if I'd like it. The way the chapter is ended it could be a one-shot. It ends on such a nice note. All sweet and loving. Please don't end it there though.

This is really good. there were a couple of grammatical errors but overall it was awesome. update!