Reviews for Demon Beside Me
BuuruuDesu chapter 6 . 8/3/2013
For One I love your story. It's just like real life with a twist of fantasy from a teenage girls mind.
TheGoddessPixie chapter 1 . 7/22/2011
Prologue:

Well, that was a whole lot of talking in circles and saying nothing at all. After reading this I have No clue what your story is about... although I'm sure it all made sense in your head when you wrote it.

I would hope so anyway.
exploring the deep chapter 22 . 9/20/2010
Hey I just finished this story and I wanted to say that I really enjoyed it. I was reading this and I thought of a movie called Heathers and I was wondering if you had seen it or not. It's actually an alright movie from the eighties, but this story just reminded me a lot of that movie.
Broken Cascade chapter 22 . 3/29/2010
The story was entertaining and had an intriguing start. The prolouge did an excellent job at capturing my attention. The idea of the Spawns and the seven sins/seven murders is a new and interesting one. However, it wasn't introduced until the very end. It seems it might have been beneficial to add that in earlier in the story.

I think that the concept behind the story was good, but it may have gotten a little muddled in the telling. The biggest problem was the abundance of technical mistakes (spelling, grammar, etc.). These mistakes made the story much more difficult to read. The story as a whole also seemed somewhat rushed. One person dies after another with barely a break in between, though the writing says there is as much as a month's gap between the murders.

I enjoyed how characters such as Kate weren't portrayed as completely bad. Most characters had multiple sides which helped to expand the story.

I appreciate your efforts in writing this and hope you keep writing in thte future.

Broken Cascade
A Girl chapter 4 . 1/19/2010
Um, where to start... well you gotta good story here, very mysterious. So far your character sounds like a true teenager, and the Queen Bee is in character. But, you have a lot of grammar and spelling errors. They're distracting, and if you want this to be at its highest quality editing it will be best. I suggest you do, the story so far, is worth it.
Jazmine chapter 22 . 10/5/2009
Love the story! can't wait to read part 2! I hope you get publish so i can read the full story. on to part 2!
Brenda chapter 22 . 9/28/2009
OMG i love your story! it was so good. it remained me of the heathers meets mean girls, but with a great twist! i read your story very quick and found myself becoming minnie. it was so easy. she seemed like she was so real. the only real thing me and minnie didn't like the same was krad. i felt krad was way out there. he needs to back off, but i think i feel for him in the end. i loved how he was willing to let her go because he loved her. i think thats when i thought hey he must love her. but anyway why does krad love her? r you going to say why in part one? but love the story non the less.
someone chapter 22 . 9/26/2009
This is like a mixture of The Contract and Heathers. LOL. And not in a good way. You really should revise this, it's TOO similar.
SmashedIce.X chapter 1 . 9/4/2009
Hiya, sorry, my PM to you cut out half way through me typing and sent itself to you by accident. This sounds really good and I'll definately keep reading! :D
silentscream4luv chapter 5 . 8/5/2009
This story is okay, i couldn't get into it, the spelling is that great. Check out a beta.
Naomi Chick chapter 5 . 8/3/2009
I'm glad Minnie stood up for herself. Although she'll need more confidence if she's going to win against Kate. Wow, Kate is super harsh with her words. I really don't like her. I can't wait to read more.
XxButterflyxAngelxBabygirl chapter 22 . 7/22/2009
I'm sorry it took me so long to read this like you asked.

It is a pretty good story. I liked it, it was rather interesting.

I have to say though, there were quiet a few mistakes. And the missing part about her name did make it a little confusing.

It was pretty good, there were just the mistakes in spelling and a little in grammer.

I can't wait to read your sequel though! I hope you can get it up soon!

Butterfly Angel
Andene chapter 1 . 7/22/2009
loving the story so far...but i must admit it has me thinking 'twilight' all over again! lol!

Still it's gotten my attention...i'm going to read the rest!
xxx Queen Of Slayers xxx chapter 22 . 7/22/2009
Hehe this was GOOD! xD
Miss-You-Too chapter 3 . 7/18/2009
Jena was died. She was died.

Died is supposed to be Dead.

MEh, Minnie is really a gloomy person kinda annoying really. I'm sad that Jen just died like that and no one even cares not even minie when she was her first freind.

Kate deserves to be hauled off a cliff and plumet to her agonizing doom.
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