|Reviews for Trust Me
| HiddenFromYou chapter 1 . 9/10/2010
This was an extremely strong piece. I was expecting something to go wrong, but you put across the emotion in such a way as to make it unique, and I really liked that. I also think the repetition is good. It helps drive home the point you're conveying and the awful truth of your words.
It's a minor quibble, but I think you should have: "he said/as he killed me" all on line. I get that you're trying to go for a pause to add effect, but I think the repetition delivers that effect quite nicely on its own.
Really strong poem here. :)
| ClosetPianist1 chapter 1 . 3/12/2009
very very very good! the repition is creative...and unfortunatley true too