Reviews for Welcome to Heartbreak |
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![]() ![]() ![]() OMG i love this story. it gets more and more interesting. I cant wait for the next chapter ;] |
![]() ![]() ![]() wait what? I just read that little bit at the end and let me just say this again... WHAT? |
![]() ![]() ![]() okay sorry that im reviewing this so early after that long email but omg i am absolutly and irrevocably in love with this chapter...or rather just the ending, man do you keep me entertained. i just cant wait to read more. so once again...houston we are over and out DUKE |
![]() ![]() ![]() cant wait for the next chapters! loved this chap btw :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() hey once again...great chapter...cant wait to see what happens next. good work update SOON! Peace:) |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw bless him i wonder why he is so angry all the time aww wat happened to his mum great story so far cant wait for the next chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() aww i know how it feel to lose a mother great start |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my gosh that was amazing. (I have a feeling many of my reviews will be starting with a line similar to that.) I loved the interaction between Adam and Eva. I'm happy that he softened, just a bit, and every part of their conversation was great. And Eva's whole dream/reality sequence was awesome. I really cannot wait for more, so please please please update soon! Michaela |
![]() ![]() ![]() I thought this was totally fantastic :) I'm so glad I found it because I haven't read a fiction press story this well written in a long time, well maybe never. I really love all the characterization you've done so far. And, since it is 1:00 in the morning I was about to go to sleep, but after reading the preview for the next chapter in your author's note, I have to read chapter three. Great work :) Oh, and I just wanted to say, for English being a second language, you've done a great job writing in English. Of course there are a few minor words that don't translate perfectly, but overall it is fantastically written. Michaela |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey there :) So, it is Spring Break and I was browsing Fan Fiction and came upon this story :) After reading the first chapter, I'm so intrigued and excited to read more :) Regardless of how cliche the storyline may be, I don't care, I love cliches, and this seems to be very well written. I cannot wait to read more :) Michaela |
![]() ![]() you know what would be weird? is her aunt and mr copper were past lovers and shes the parent of adam but that would ruin everything cause then itll be kinda incest if eva got with adam right? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hullo. I think that your English is very good, especially as it is your second language. So congratulations for that. Also, in the first chapter you mentioned that it was going to have a cliché-type plotline, and I can't say that I've ever read a story quite like this. You're doing a good job keeping away from the clichés. Please update soon, too. :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like this chapter! It was very helpful for character development. I found it funny that she thought it was all a dream, and I'm really glad she spoke her mind when they were in the stables! And when I said you're writing is different it was most DEFINITELY in the positive manner! If it wasn't I wouldn't have read past the first chapter. lol. Good job! Can't wait for more! :D |
![]() ![]() oh...wonder what part Vince plays in Eva and Adams lives...i LOVE this story, please oh please, im down on my knees, update soon, oh, and happy b-day! D D D |
![]() ![]() i love this chapter and the other one too, but i love this chpater more. its so cool the way that eva always comes face to face with adam, especially when she bumped him holding red wine, LOL, adam sure deserves that for being such a jerk. please update the next chapter soon! i'll be so very happy if you do D |