Reviews for Welcome to Heartbreak |
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![]() ![]() ![]() hey update soon...cant wait to see what happens next. good work. Peace;) |
![]() ![]() Nice story, please update soon:) thanx! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really really really really like this story! I love the characters and Eva! She's SO funny! Keep up the good work! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like where your going with this story. Although I cant quite figure out Adam. I cant wait for the next update. Great job. |
![]() ![]() ![]() AGAIN, you astound me with your...wonderfully thought out cliches lol. i love the characters, especially adam, idk i have a thing for angry guys its a weakness i tell you. great way to make the pretty girl nice rather than a bitch, i really like that. you know what i was thinking of and decided i needed a second opinion and here you are..okay ill run it by you, its a character for a storyline The guy would be tall, dressed like a greaser (like from grease or crybaby) with the dark hair, tight blue jeans, white muscle shirt, cigarette in lips...so what do you think should i use it? |
![]() ![]() ![]() TO start with i really am enjoying the plot of your story. and I THink the main idea is great HOWVER: Oh Mother... why did you left me? You, on my way, again?” Ok so you should notice the very evident errors in those two sentences. secondly, your story does not flow properly and the way you write makes it hard for us readers to really understand whats going on. When you write its seems like your just writing it, without backing up whats actually going on. All the best and I hope you get better :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Keep going or else you'll have actual nightmares of Sadako tonight. Kidding aside! Haha... :) Happy Birthday! |
![]() ![]() tis is a really great story, i like it very much, and i so hope you could update real soon, i wanna know more about eva and that arrogant adam :) |
![]() ![]() This is a good start and I hope this'll be good. I liked your other story, The Sweetest Sin also. Great job on both stories. |
![]() ![]() ![]() hey u definitely have to continue writing...cant wait to see what happens next. actually ur summary was great aswell...it really wanted me to get started asap. i like these kinds of stories. so great work and update soon! peace:) |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is great. MORE :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() i like it! cereally! i do.. i hope the second chapter is up soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like the story. It's really sad since her mom died. But I like it. And you're grammar isn't bad! So don't worry, you write really well with English being your second language! I LOVE your description of the Coopers! It's really good! I LOVE how you describe their eyes! AWESOME! Can't wait for the next update! :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() HOLY MARY MOTHER OF GOD! i was not expecting this, i opened the story and said "self this may be another cliche but lets give it a try" and you completly blew me out of the water this is nothing like a cliche its really good, i like the plot line and the characters and EVERYTHING, i beg of you do not stop |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh This sounds good! I thought it would be all sucky and OMG he's so handsome but NO I can not think this blah de blah. But this...this was AWESOME! :) I can't wiat for the next update! |