Reviews for Welcome to Heartbreak
FlowerNinjagurl101 chapter 2 . 3/23/2009
hey update soon...cant wait to see what happens next.

good work.

Peace;)
Geisha chapter 2 . 3/23/2009
Nice story, please update soon:) thanx!
greenestar chapter 2 . 3/22/2009
I really really really really like this story! I love the characters and Eva! She's SO funny! Keep up the good work! :D
Nicole Deming chapter 2 . 3/22/2009
I like where your going with this story. Although I cant quite figure out Adam. I cant wait for the next update. Great job.
tornangelwings chapter 2 . 3/22/2009
AGAIN, you astound me with your...wonderfully thought out cliches lol.

i love the characters, especially adam, idk i have a thing for angry guys its a weakness i tell you.

great way to make the pretty girl nice rather than a bitch, i really like that.

you know what i was thinking of and decided i needed a second opinion and here you are..okay ill run it by you, its a character for a storyline

The guy would be tall, dressed like a greaser (like from grease or crybaby) with the dark hair, tight blue jeans, white muscle shirt, cigarette in lips...so what do you think should i use it?
Ms.Romantic chapter 2 . 3/22/2009
TO start with i really am enjoying the plot of your story. and I THink the main idea is great

HOWVER:

Oh Mother... why did you left me?

You, on my way, again?”

Ok

so you should notice the very evident errors in those two sentences.

secondly,

your story does not flow properly and the way you write makes it hard for us readers to really understand whats going on. When you write its seems like your just writing it, without backing up whats actually going on.

All the best

and I hope you get better :)
A.P Luis chapter 2 . 3/22/2009
Keep going or else you'll have actual nightmares of Sadako tonight. Kidding aside! Haha... :)

Happy Birthday!
Akira chapter 2 . 3/22/2009
tis is a really great story, i like it very much, and i so hope you could update real soon, i wanna know more about eva and that arrogant adam :)
ABC123 chapter 1 . 3/20/2009
This is a good start and I hope this'll be good. I liked your other story, The Sweetest Sin also. Great job on both stories.
FlowerNinjagurl101 chapter 1 . 3/18/2009
hey u definitely have to continue writing...cant wait to see what happens next.

actually ur summary was great aswell...it really wanted me to get started asap. i like these kinds of stories.

so great work

and

update soon!

peace:)
KATE-tastrophe chapter 1 . 3/18/2009
this is great. MORE :)
HeyyyitsPickle chapter 1 . 3/15/2009
i like it! cereally! i do.. i hope the second chapter is up soon!
greenestar chapter 1 . 3/14/2009
I really like the story. It's really sad since her mom died. But I like it. And you're grammar isn't bad! So don't worry, you write really well with English being your second language! I LOVE your description of the Coopers! It's really good! I LOVE how you describe their eyes! AWESOME! Can't wait for the next update! :D
tornangelwings chapter 1 . 3/14/2009
HOLY MARY MOTHER OF GOD!

i was not expecting this, i opened the story and said "self this may be another cliche but lets give it a try" and you completly blew me out of the water this is nothing like a cliche its really good, i like the plot line and the characters and EVERYTHING, i beg of you do not stop
Julia Nathan chapter 1 . 3/14/2009
Oh This sounds good! I thought it would be all sucky and OMG he's so handsome but NO I can not think this blah de blah. But this...this was AWESOME! :) I can't wiat for the next update!
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