I'm glad to be back on FP tonight...my inner fangirl do a happy dance in my head lol

So in the first chapter it's was not you that write the sex scene? Well don't worry for this one...she's a good, sexy, yummy sex scene!

You didn't have to put a warning, i'm not that an obsessive vege, it's just that my husband had planned this for tonight (burger) and i just can't (and i don't want)imagine him orgams on a burger lol br... haha!

Good luck with your paper! I'm going to be a good fan and wait for my next fix of Kenba/Devon.

Gwen

p.s. i'm not sure for my english on this review, sorry if you don't understand something.

THE SMEX WAS REALLY GOOD! They're finally one! *cries* I only have one complaint with this chapter and its that it was hard to tell when Devon was thinking his dialogue and not saying it out loud for the other characters in the room to hear. It got a little confusing when I thought he was saying that stuff out loud at first, but then I realized he was just thinking it.

Really great chapter. Update as soon as you can.

that was a very nice sex scene. i once wrote one, but i havent been able to write another one since its nerve-racking.

please keep on the good work

oh, please i wanna see what happens! wait, is curtis (what a fucking son of a bitch!) a werelion? since i got that impression when he appeared.

Ahh! Not another Cliff hanger! Mean! This chapter had me on edge the entire way through. I was scared that Kenba wasn't going to show up and that Curtis was going to win. ahh! You have a great style of writing and I love this story. And even if the cliff hangers drive me crazy they make the story just that more addictive. Looking forward to the next chapter!

PS Curtis is a bitch (along with 100 other curse words)

Oh and I love the meat part. I couldn't stop laughing. Super cute!

YES I WAS SO WAITING FOR KENBA TO SHOW UP AGAIN U_U mayb what's his name (its been so long since your last update that i forgot his name ! ) will finnaly realize his mistake and take back kenba chyea

keep up the good work!

-el

oh my god1 i must have more! your so mean! DX -tries to wait patiently for the next chapter- _

*Yes, Curtis is a cocky son of a bitch. Yes, you are supposed to hate him. I wanna pinch his cheeks if he said "kitten" one more time! grr!*

So if i want to emasculate him, i can? Hate this kind of guy. Jealous pathetic excuse of man! Prove yourself if you want to be the *chef*.

I don't eat red meat, this pass was a little...beark! lol

Wait for tomorrow...let's go Kenba, beat his ass!

Gwen

Let me first start by saying that this is a really intrigueing story. I definitely want to keep reading. I want to find out what exactly is going on. I also feel very bad for Devon, everything in his past with his ex and being outed, his parents. Sad :(

Now, on to the slight critisism. Your writing flows nicely, it doesn't seem forced at all. You've got plenty of details. You can write... But, and this is a big problem that some writers on fictionpress has. You do not write two people speaking in one paragraph. It just makes it confusing to the reader (half the time you don't know who's speaking) and it's just inncorrect and looks messy. It would be accurate writing form (whatever you want to call it) If you skip a line (start a new paragraph) when another person is speaking. Like for example:

"Are you ok?" he asked, his eyes still filled with anger and worry.

"I, uh..." - so basically like that. you don't have two characters speaking in one paragraph (granted there are very small exceptions to it, which the dialogue you've so far isn't) At least this is to my knowledge. I mean, I do read quite a lot, and I've never come across a published story with two people speaking in one paragraph so often.

anyway, I hope I explained it right. And I hope you don't take offence or anything. I'm just trying to help. I'll continue on to the next chapter now... I just really wanted to point that out since it was bothering me to no end.

Great story so far!

eVil-uNicorns

Amazing! Only 3 chapters and already so much has happened. I love the Devon and Kenba, there so interesting. I cant wait to read what happens next~!

This certainly seems interesting.

Very interesting and original. Both Kenba and Devon are interesting characters that I cannot wait to see more of. Update as soon as possible!

wow i love this so so much . please upadate soon! i want to see devon back to where he belongs next to kenba!

keep up the good work ]

-el

I glare in your general direction! Not for anything bad but because you left it on a cliffhanger! Mean! And just when I was starting to fall in love with Devon and Kenba's interactions. They are so cute! Update soon please.

Yep,Shini-chan,go run and hide! You made quite a cliff-hanger... AGAIN. dare I say that there's trouble in heaven? But now I like Devon even more. It would've been really weird if he was something like 'Oh.I'll become an over-grown cat .That's fine as long as you love me'(insert squeal as he tackleglomps him)*headdesk* that would've just been bad. I like where your going with this. Though I was a bit sad for Kenba at the end...I mean,he is an animal for the most part,so what he did was kinda understanding...Oh wow,have I rambled here or what. Am gonna stop now. Work hard on the next one w