Reviews for i wander
evermorerose chapter 1 . 10/6/2009
This is a very perfect poem. I love it so much! Oh. and thanks for reviewing on my poem. you were the irst one to do that..
XxdaytimedreamerxX chapter 1 . 8/15/2009
Hi derli,

I read this poem and was left in awe by the raw emotion portrayed within the stanzas. you have talent. please continue to do what you do so well. thanks for reviewing my poem :)


softlycryingrain chapter 1 . 4/22/2009
I love the dry, spartan landscape you paint-city of tombs, abyss, cracked earth-and then the contrast of the tears and the "trickle of freedom."

Your use of personification is really interesting too, with Fear, Terror, Doubt and Discouragement. I especially enjoyed the alliteration of "ghastly ghouls Doubt and Discouragement"

The repetition of "I wander" and "Will I ever" really emphasized the desolate, despairing feeling of this poem.

You did a great job expressing that dark spiritual place you mentioned in the summary. I'm really glad that it sounds like you are no longer there!

If this is one of your first poems, I'm interested to see what else you have written.

LostInMe chapter 1 . 3/19/2009

"soul shriveling, bones drying" - my favorite line!

I also applaud your use of personification: "dragons Fear and Terror guard my exit," and "ghastly ghouls Doubt and Discouragement lure me toward the abyss."

All in all, a great poem.