Reviews for The Other Side
searchlight chapter 1 . 3/19/2009
It's nice to see you branching out into a different kind of verse. I usually prefer things a little different or with a changing rhyme scheme but you know me, I'm a free-form kind of gal. The only phrase that seemed kind of awkward was the 10th line. Perhaps it was the repetitive 'me' or that it seemed too much like a sentence, instead of something like 'and upon seeing me well-nourished'. Also with 'preoccupied attention' it's kind of given that your attention until the feather was otherwise occupied so it might have grearter impact if you use one or the other. Maybe it's just me. Other than that...pretty cool.