Reviews for Saffron
Kate Marshall chapter 1 . 3/21/2009
Your first line is great. "A callous crow call," I /love/ it. It started off the poem wonderfully. The alliteration in it is really cool, too. ;)

I also like your word choice.

in languid winter air

drips into my window -

a hollow eye and glass veneer.

Certain words you use just add so much to your tone. In the second stanza, your tone is so flat, and I strangely find myself loving it.

And on a yellow bus,

there's flat and tired

faces, and girls I can tell

look like their mothers.

That second stanza for some reason is one of my favorite lines from this poem. You're very frank in this. And I think that that fits the poem amazingly well.

Although I have to say I'm a little confused as to what your main subject is. You don't even allude to it much. All I can say about the poem is that it was well written and pretty. But I can't say that I related to it or anything. So that, for me, takes away from your poem.

But nice job!

-Katie, from the Review Marathon (link's in the profile!)
Justin Vengeance chapter 1 . 3/19/2009
The second poem of yours I've reviewed

I must say I love your cultural references and your choice of words.