Reviews for In
Avital Fly chapter 1 . 3/20/2009
i thought this was very good...im guna add it to my faves...i thought th repitition made it good and it set a image well
CreativeJuice chapter 1 . 3/20/2009
Ok so, you wrote a poem good for you!...I couldn't agree less with the above reveiwer though it really isn't "Fresh and Raw", it is in fact "Old and Samey"

Why?

Because its generic angst poetry

All this shows is that you have the ability to think of pretty dark things and write them down on a page...Theres no feeling in this poem at all and quite frankly I find the fact someone of 12 can write something so visually disgusting rather shocking

C.J
limpwrist chapter 1 . 3/20/2009
The repitition got a little much, but in general I loved this piece. For something written by a 12 year old it's brilliant, very fresh and raw.