Reviews for Guardian |
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![]() ![]() ![]() You really should people's names at points in the story more. Because I was confused on who she was even talking to. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay! You updated! I came to fiction press just to see if you had updated on a whim, and there it was. Definitely made my evening. I am a little confused about Matt's dream, but I'm sure you will clear it up in the next chapter. |
![]() ![]() SO GLAD YOU UPDATED! awesome story |
![]() ![]() ![]() can't wait for more, i am dying to see where you are taking this. it's great, good work |
![]() ![]() This is Matt's POV right? |
![]() ![]() wow...creepy...i'm getting shivers! |
![]() ![]() great chapter! I love it, i can't wait to see what happens to andy? did she die? you can't kill off a main character like that! |
![]() ![]() ![]() you updated! When I saw the alert I freaked haha Interesting chapter I hope Andy is okay poor girl goes through so much. Great update and I am definitely looking forward to the next post! :) |
![]() ![]() i just found this story today and i'm so glad I found it. I actually prefer the vampire to Matt. The vampire hasn't hurt her too much yet, but Matt has being torturing her for years. Doesn't he regularly beat her up, or tell others to? That is not cute or romantic. I don't know why everybody is a fan of him. Maybe everyone these days is a masochistic. I wish she would beat him up and run away once she breaks the ward. Hmm..it sounds like she's holding back something, even though her powers are unpredictable and weak, i know she is going to be super powerful. But first she needs to take revenge on Matt. She will no longer be his prey. In the latest chapter the last line mentioned was " it had to be a disease if she was in his dream." Alludes to Andy right? She's the bunny? Well, the biggest question of them all is why does Matt torture her? What is her grand role? She can't possibly just be someone he likes to bully, it's either he's hiding something from her (which he is for sure), he is a very dedicated bully or a raging psychopath (which is probably the latter). But seriously, this man gets no brownie points from me. He attacks her 95% of the time, and forcibly bites her, and is nice to her once, and suddenly everybody loves him. Nope. Not me, run away Andy, run the hell away. Great story so far, chapters are a little short, and sometimes it's a little hard to understand what you are talking about. But that stuff can all be fixed with editing. As for actual writing style, add more descriptions, it's too much- to the point and not enough dancing around the words, if you get what I mean? But seriously the storyline is amazing. Can't wait till your next update. -Sara |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay! You updated! What a good Christmas present please update again soon! |
![]() ![]() i am loving this story! I can't wait to find out what happens between matt and andy :D so far it's the best one i've read on here so please update soon! Xoxo |
![]() ![]() More! I totally need more! He had a dream about her! I'm guessing when she is absent at school he is going to realise there is more truth to the dream. But what is the creature? |
![]() ![]() OH yay! I was just thinking about this story yesterday wondering when you are going to update and bam! there are two chapters to read! yay! You set the scene amazingly in this chapter. I love the description of the cave 'leaking a fetid stench' :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() great chapters, a bit confusing as what is happening with Andy though! please update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love it! I just wish it was longer. you are an amazing writer you just have a way of pulling your audience in from the very first sentence of your writing. update soon! |