|Reviews for arm length of memories|
| Little girl Big world chapter 1 . 8/16/2009
I really like the title of this and the subject matter.
"waiting for our lives to begin"
-This line really stuck out to me. I like it!
The parts in parenthesis were great.
| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 3/27/2009
How simple everything seems now,—
Now that it’s folded memories.
That which we failed to understand,
Haunts heart with simple clarity.
But then we had anxiety,
About the time we should arrive ;
And whether all our clothes fit right.
What was it that we left at home
That we were sure we’d brought along ?
For everything we had a care,
Much more than ere we had of Thee ;
Yet ages past we pause backwards :
The only thing reflects is Thee.
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 3/21/2009
I felt like the last line in the first stanza needed a word there. Wishing the bus would come or something like that.
"appreciate it for what it was"... shouldn't it be them? Aren't you referring back to the days?
"constantly waiting for"... waiting,
I kind of wanted punctuation here. Some of the transitions between lines seemed odd without it. I did like the piece go. The parts in parenthesis were really great. I also liked the message of the piece. I can definitely relate to it.
PS If you're bored this weekend, check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (links in my profile)
| socks-lost chapter 1 . 3/21/2009
I like this. Its delicate sounding and the growing a part is relateable.