excellent , totaly enjoyed it. fiction but reads like non fiction very well done.

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Amazing story! Update soon!

An EXCELLENT writing. It was very easy to see everything in the mind's eye. Thank you for sharing it.

Its an impressive story but I still get confused about the girl herself. I know she is a white-taught girl but it seems strange and stilted to hear her thinking Indian thoughts about the wild, the hunt and the seasons in terms we are more familiar with - the years by numbers, the seasons by months and so on. It does enrich the reading though because its such an unusual view to have in a western story at all.

One constructive comment I might have - mainly because its something I have hit myself in my own novel - is that it is screamingly difficult to write a believable female role if you happen to be a male author! That is made even more difficult here since she is a cross-cultural character involved in two cultures, neither of which I am particularly at home with. In your position I would - and in fact did - go and grab someone female and in as near as possible to the real situation that you are describing. For me, that was easy since I needed a female police officer. How you would find someone like our little commanche girl is difficult to imagine!

Awesome Cref. Your story kept me coming back and read it to the end. Very good detail and story telling. Please let me know when you have more online!

this is awesome! i love it. cant wait till nxt chapter:)

I like this little girl!

You are really good at making it long. I like the story line, it is interesting and kept me reading.