I just have to say that I love your story and I've read it a long time ago and it really saddened me when you didn't update for a whole year and soon I forgot all about it but now I remembered it and I was just wondering if you're planning on finishing the story or not. And I know it's a weird question to ask especially since the last update was in 2010 and as you can see now it's 2015 but please if you're still active on this website please let me know. Thank you

I want to apologize firstly for not liking this story. Honestly I did try to keep reading but by the end of chapter six I could no longer force myself to. In an attempt to hopefully help you further your writing ability with critisicm, I will list what irked me. Of course, these are simply my opinions and you can ignore it if you so desire.
On Sophie-Anne: I admit the biggest reason I could not read was because I could not stand her character. I tried to tell myself that the point of the story might be her character development but, for me, if I cannot relate to a character or find him/her aggressively unlikeable, I cannot root for them. For me, Sophie-Anne was the type of person I would not get near with a ten foot pole. She belittles the homeless by implying they are ugly, regrets admiring the back of someone's head if they turn out to be disfigured or female, and constantly implies that she is a good person through verbally combating story antagonists and simply because she seems to believe it to be true. I understand if this was not your intention and I hope you know that I am only stating what I felt upon reading. After reacting so negatively to being stood up, she's perfectly okay with giving it another go when she sees Angelo and hears his voice because he's apparently very good looking with a swoon-worthy voice. She also has no problem spilling her life story to talk about herself after Angelo blatantly diverted the topic so that his job is not the subject but even after noting the sudden and suspicious change, she happily obliges and changed the topic to herself. Another thing about her that I could not stand was her incessant need to lose her virginity. It may be personal issues that make me like her less for it but this need would also make her less desirable to Angelo, a man liking for a normal relationship and not one ruled by sex, correct? It seems to me that by looking for a normal girl (who did not care that she had seen him making out with a stranger the day before he asked her out and stod her up) who does not prioritize sex, he finds a girl who obsesses over his sex-appeal and tries at every chance to have sex with him despite not giving an admittedly annoying but decidedly not bad character like Charlie's a chance.

On Sophie-Anne's mother/miscellaneous antagonists: the woman is unnecessarily horrible. A woman as seemingly confident and self-respecting as Sophie-Anne would most likely be unwilling to put up with such cliche blind antagonistic behavior. Most stories do have the main character suffering some form of abuse but the absolute vindictiveness and ignorance with which the mother treats her daughter seemed too unrealistic to me. It seemed to be begging for sympathy from the readers despite the fact that Sophie-Anne strikes me as just as bad. Also, the fact that she demands things after several harsh and blatant insults that Sophie-Anne inevitably agrees to appears too fabricated to be true, as though Sophie-Anne, contradicting her own thoughts and words, needs her mother's approval or simply to prove a point to the woman she supposed would rather not hear from. To me, it does not make sense.

There were also spelling errors but I can forgive them. "Definitely" was spelt "defiantly" and "too" was "to" but those are common mistakes or perhaps just autocorrects of some sort.

Another thing I noticed was all dialogue began the paragraph in which dialogue took place. A minor concern to be sure, but it still irritated me.

good.

Is that the end?

Interesting. Sophie-Anne is cute. In this chapter, you spelt 'quiet' & 'butt' wrongly. Sorry, I just keep seeing mistakes so I just have to point them out.

Haish. The last part sucked for Sophie-Anne. pouts But, good chapter :) Some mistakes though. I hope you don't mind me pointing them out. They are 'passed on my order to another beautiful college', 'to bad the chance was taken by Starbucks' and 'I called after my colege'.

Um hi! This is pretty awkward, considering that it's a pretty old story around here... I just wanted to say that I really enjoyed it (minus the grammar and whatnot here and there...)! I really hope you continue this story cos it really was barrels of fun! Well, nice to know you!

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Awww. Please update this story! I won't give up hope.

Yay! I want to read more about Chris. I like reading about atypical relationships.

Oh boy. That's so sad. She HAS to forgive Angelo now.

Man, her family is so messed up that it's funny

What does Angelo think he's doing? He doesn't really have time for a relationship. Is he stringing Sophie-Anne along because he's curious about having a real relationship?

This story sounds really good to me so far and I'm only in two chapters deep. I see you haven't updated in a while though, so that makes me kinda sad.

Aww, it was just getting better! Please, when possible, update! :D