|Reviews for Light|
| deefective chapter 1 . 10/18/2009
Well, I really did enjoy the beginning of this piece. The flow was perfect, the word choice perfect, and it was really poetic. I think around the part, "...and my soul.", it started to get a bit sloppy. It seemed like the rest of the piece after that wasn't as clean as the beginning and that's a shame because this was off to great start. I liked the first time you used the colon after "Find myself here" because it read effectively. But then when you put it after "Listening", it seemed useless there to me. The line would've made more of a statement without that. But nonetheless, I did enjoy this. Nicely done.
| Isca chapter 1 . 6/16/2009
"Hollow breaths." Nice word choice.
"I am calmed." The tone of this line is so profound.
Oh, the imagery of the hymn lingering with the speaker's soul is absolutely stunning-how precious!
"Watching me." The tone of this line is very interesting-it's almost as if the bird's are wise beings who are able to look beyond her and see her darkest desires.
"I am with God." BEAUTIFUL. :)
| Avali-San chapter 1 . 3/25/2009
| HighOnBrokenWings chapter 1 . 3/24/2009