Reviews for Deep in your heart
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 4/25/2009
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"they can't understand but deep in your heart."... you don't need the word but

"You're naked and dressed again."... I really like that line. The contradiction is really well done and creative.

"they can't see but the mask you've carried"... again you don't need the word but

"You're pretty like an raped mannequin.."... a raped

Really powerful piece. I like the piece a lot.
May Elizabeth chapter 1 . 4/19/2009
Whoah. This is powerful. I love it.
Lilja Ruusu chapter 1 . 3/25/2009
"Deep in my heart where everything is forgotten."

That was the best line. I loved this one alot! D
Isca chapter 1 . 3/25/2009
"You're pretty like a raped mannequin." An absolutely shocking, mind-blowing, brilliant line! :)
Franziska chapter 1 . 3/25/2009
raped Mannequin ist gut, sicher eine Anspielung auf deinen penname?
C. M. Levy chapter 1 . 3/25/2009
The line of raped mannequin broke the pretty little ideal you were writing. Brought the whole thing back to reality which was a very nice and effective touch.

Overall this was brilliant.