The story is powerful, I like how it was presented. Good job writer! If you have some great stories like this one, you can publish it on NovelStar, just submit your story to or

Quite an interesting little yarn, my good man. Nero and co really laid the smack down on that literal crazy train. This story promises quite a bit from the other Van Wessel tales to follow. The Harlequin seems to have highly diverse interests which stretch far beyond San Fransisco so that promises a lot of variety in the stories and so on. Also, if they continue to travel with Torrent there will be the promise of insane technology-related mishaps.

This awesome. Jave's stuff is pretty cool, and you only enhanced it. You do a great job of describing the action in a way that gives you details without dragging. Plus battle-trains are always awesome.

You also do a great job of characterization given the relatively short length. I'll have to check out the stories featuring the Van Wessels.

I like how much less phallic Judas became the second Jave was no longer writing.

Highly entertaining, Cthulhu. Nice to see something good come out of Jave's tropes (har har). You 'fleshed out' the Deranger and Judas quite a bit, which I like, and the Van Wessels & Co. all seem like really interesting characters whom I'd love to read about again.

In fact, can I? Have they appeared in earlier fiction of yours? If not, you should definitely consider it. And I'm curious about this 'Harlequin' character...

Anyway, we need to make you an honorary member of the Extropeons. If Jave hasn't mentioned what that is, ask him. You'd be a valuable addition.

P.S. Having recently gotten into the genre, I just want to tip my hat to you for your avid dedication to pulp-style fiction. ;)