OMG, this is adorable! XD

Ok, so at first, I thought that this was going to be an RG WEREwolf pack, but an "ordinary" wolf pack works just as well.

Introductory sentence is very funny! XD

Oooh—ouch. It should be "she-wolf", not "she wolf". That's a lot of stuff to correct. DX

[officially the second biggest wolf] - - - "second-biggest" (also, I saw a "mid stride" earlier that should be "mid-stride"). Also, also, I would put "second" in italics, just because. ;P)

It's not clear where Fang is coming from, Fang. Also, these wolves aren't acting very... wolfy. Ah, well, I suppose that's what the "Fantasy" is for. XD

[Frac had to be a monster, or some form of Death reincarnate. For a moment, breathing became optional. All I could do was cower under the amber eyed gaze of this phantom of darkness, hoping for a quick and painless death.] - - - I almost suffocated when I first read this! XD. I would make it "Death, incarnate."

Squeaks! Squeaky squeaks! XD

Also, you should call Frac the "matriarch", or something, seeing as "Alpha" is a designation for a male wolf. (Once again, this is just me being all scientific, and what-not).\

To reiterate: this is adorable! X3

CV

this is fan fic go stick it where it belongs

Rabbits are virgins - xD

This chapter amused me.

Your descriptions, grammar, punctuations and everything were pretty good too.

Rabbits are virgins? XD Great stuff.

The chapter title is funny!

The portrayal of the personalities of the RGers through their various quirks and habits is cool. The conversations between the real person and the wolf are nicer that way!

The wolf-shaped mountain cracked me up! Way cool! The description of the surroundings are great too. They're really detailed and easy to picture!

x mandy

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The summary is what brought me here! The beginning too is really funny and cool. I like those kind of introductions to stories - they make it so much more interesting. I like the part where Fang is welcomes to the pack. Yet, he doesn't quite feel at home. That feeling could lead to an awesome plot.

""Don't lie to the poor thing, Karas," Lassie yipped in amusement. "No one likes Frac right away!"

Love that line! The humor in this chapter is really great D

x mandy

~Courtesy Review Marathon~

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I don't have much concrit to give right now but good job, Fang. I think this was completly unique and really stetched what an RGFF could be.

The ending of this chap was weak in some spot mostly becasue of the dialogue but it was good.

This was well worth following. Thanks for the great read.

Bubbles :P

Oh em gee... I... *mouth moves wordlessly* Fang! Congratz! On, this entire thing was epic, epic, EPIC!

Epic.

["Half of my pack is dead..." Frac sat down in the mud. "Alright. New order of business. Make babies, all of you!"] I choked on my orange juice...

Ahh, just... hehehe, brilliant. Thank you for writing this, Fang, dear. Much love. :3

[[ "What?" Sir barked. "I don't want him as an Alpha!" "Don't worry, pipsqueak," Interpol said. "I'll establish clear mating rules."]] this is excellent. haha! love it!

thanks for coming back for me, even though you didn't wanna. :P Sesshy's lame, why didn't he go for his BFF Radio? haha.

...where did Mini go? D: curse my memory, I don't remember!

and where is Reggy? D: save Frac, Reggy!

[[She popped him over the ear]] what?

oh... I forgot Mini was dead...

[["Alright. New order of business. Make babies, all of you!"]] *giggles*

[[turning back just in time to see Lime tackle the other wolf to the ground.]] *giggles*

good ending! I would've liked to see the induction of new wolves, but this suits me just fine, too. :3

BFF poweh! *glomp*

-Sheriff.

zomg ominous mood!

It looks like I'm behind... several chapters. Must make headway soon!

this seems like a setup for a number of bad things to happen... :O

lol figures Sesshy would be the one to recognize all of the scents. XD

yay, you saved me! :3

I thought Maya was dead already?

you know, I was thinking - we have a new bunch of semi-regulars, are you going to include them in the last chapter? rebuilding 'n stuff, yeh?

"and the vein attacked to the back of the eye" - attached. it's the optic nerve, FYI. also, do eyeballs really deflate? o.

oh noes! Frac! DX

good chapter, friend :D don't keep us waiting long!

*manages, somehow, to unclench her fingers from the edge of her desk*

Bloomin' hell, Fang... I... really don't have anything coherent or helpful to say. Murhar.

(P'raps something along the lines of "EPIC WIN" might do? Maybe?)

Keep up the awesome and nailbiting work...

If you're not going to include me anymore, at least kill me off gloriously.

Kthx :P

Keep on.

only two chapters left? dawwh D:

...I'm such a hero. XD

so much death and gore! it's a good thing I like you :P

wow! ACTION!

this wasa wonderful chapter and poor Beatles! but evil me would actually would've liked to see something really dramatic go on with Beatles. But I got a bit confused there because I think you got the sexes mixed up somewhere... but then that being said, I'm a bit hyped today and was reading fast.

would've liked this: "Silence came down." "Dead and strong." That would've been stronger with the shorter sentences I think.

Anyways. WOW!

So um, wait, both Frac and Beatles are females?

so corp was the creature in the forest that kidnapped them?

i dont want them to leave shortie behind! so sad.

cant wait for more.

keep up the good work.