I really liked it :D It burned great imagery into my mind

Your work is very lyrical, and fantastical, although, this piece had a completely different feel to it then the last one I read.

Honestly, it felt short to me, like you wanted to say more, but you didn't know where to go with it. Maybe? And I think that the overall weight of the verses was lacking. They could have been stronger, and you could always explain more about the angels, why their wings are breaking, and go more in depth with the constant aching that you explore throughout. The reader doesn't see it the way you do, so always giving more detail with these types of work, are best.

For your age though, these are very good. You have a clear voice throughout.

Much love,

Juliet.

You always write awesome stuff! (glare of envy) (smiles) This is like...my fav of you're now! Deserves all the attention in the world! With thousands of reviews parading this poem to the top! ...So...hi! I love the sentence "How long can it burn?"