Reviews for When you know it's just a few steps ahead
irenethewriter chapter 1 . 3/28/2009
Firstly I want to say that I really liked this poem, especially the first stanza and the very last line (and how it has no punctuation - it is very effective). I noticed a mistake in these lines, though. "Everything that's living has fail you" Failed? And "'Is miracle still true?'" A miracle or are miracles? And also "You wishes to end" should be 'you wish it to end' or 'your wishes for it to end' or something like that. Also, I didn't fully understand the line "and your brain gives a slap." Does that mean like you realize that your imagination should stop thinking of those things? Overall though, this was very good. Keep on writing!