|Reviews for More Than Anyone|
| Cassadaga chapter 9 . 10/6/2014
The emotional shifts are giving me whiplash! And sometimes I feel like Ben is TOO harsh, like telling Jessie the thought of being with Olivia made him sick. Too far, Ben.
Also, it didn't quite make sense to have Ben translate the horses name to Olivia. Because she wouldn't know the spelling of it and surely, if Ben's saying the name aloud, she would be hearing it the way it's pronounced. The phonetic explanation was there for readers, but it didn't make sense to have it that way.
Also, wasn't this trip happening for the sake of visiting their best friends? And so far they've spent one afternoon with Jamie and violet..? Since Jamie and Vi only live 15 mins outside London, wouldn't it make sense to have the four of them doing touristy stuff when they first arrived? Also violet surely would have let Olivia stay at her house, so Ben never would have had to get her a hotel room.
Of course, this goes against the advancing of the romantic plot
Sheesh this review sounds like a complaint! I promise it's not. This was a very beautiful and pretty chapter. I was just pointing out things that could be refined...I still love it!
| Cassadaga chapter 8 . 10/6/2014
I really love this! But Ben shouldn't be saying "mom"-British people say "mum" and they consider it to be a sort of patriotic thing. They would never say mom. That's like calling football soccer-it goes against national identity lol
Also it was weird to say that his home is "between Edinburgh and Inverness" because those two cities are pretty far apart. There are other large cities between them like St Andrews, Dundee, Aberdeen. It just wasn't a natural thing to say because Edinburgh and Inverness are ao far apart. (I lived in Edinburgh so that's why I'm commenting on this. I don't expect everyone to know the distances so it's no big deal, but I thought you might like to know :) )
I like the flaws the characters have and the way this is written. At first I thought this was all set in the UK somewhere because of the names and way they spoke. Dunno. But you do a good job of making Brits sound British. And omg is Harry's name Harry Potter? Haha awesome. Also, I did enjoy the different and unexpected POVs, such as Harry's.
My fictionpress name is Cassadaga but I'm on my phone and it's a hassle to sign in. I will leave more reviews as I read on!
| Guest chapter 22 . 10/5/2014
They left the stove on! Awesome though. Really nice story.
| Sam chapter 22 . 10/2/2014
Do you always take this long to update? It's a good story but I don't want to get further invested in this story if I have to wait two months between updates
| Carmel March chapter 22 . 9/25/2014
I was so thrilled to see an update for this story! This chapter was so incredibly cute and sweet and I'm eagerly awaiting the next :)
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/25/2014
When are you going to update? I read all of this from start to finish and it gets old checking everyday for a month to reveal you still haven't updated! Please update! :)
| HayleyMicheals09 chapter 1 . 9/19/2014
Great story! I love Livi and Ben together, great couple. :)
| Melissa chapter 22 . 9/18/2014
I love this story and having recently gotten a new chapter but now having to wait again has put me into withdrawal! Please update soon!
| droppedastitch chapter 22 . 9/11/2014
I really love this story! And that's quite a cliffhanger! :P
| droppedastitch chapter 16 . 9/9/2014
"He was thinking with Little Ben" haha that is so funny! I'm loving this story :)
| R0sie chapter 22 . 9/6/2014
Definitely need more update.
| R0sie chapter 18 . 9/6/2014
I can't believe this chapter. Toby's a jerk what the hell he just doing while he already has a fiancee. Wish things aren't getting too messed up with Ben and Olivia. I think I will not sleep before I finished reading all the chapters! *or perhaps fallen asleep on the way*
| R0sie chapter 16 . 9/6/2014
Just saw the character pictures in your bio (also wondering who is he? Ben trully is good looking) and Olivia's most likely looked like in my imagination *oh sorry for the bad grammar*
| R0sie chapter 12 . 9/6/2014
Geez, Ben. Why I'm not surprised he'd say nothing to Olivia but it saddened me. So sorry for the spamming review I can't help it.
| R0sie chapter 11 . 9/6/2014
Again and again, butterflies in my stomach how could you...! And I love Harry and Anne, gosh! They complete each other just like Ben and Olivia, it really is dream-like.