Reviews for Butterfly Wishes
Mercyette chapter 1 . 4/25/2009
Review for the RG's Review Marathon - Link in Profile

This is such a sweet story! The theme with Jake and the butterflies is too cute. I like this story because you really convey your message well, about believing in miracles and that anything can happen. It's very uplifting.

I would recommend you split the story up into chapters, that way it makes it easier on the reader - and you would have more updates and possibly more reviews that way. You might also want to find a beta to help with the grammar issues. This piece is too cute to have a flaw! LOL.

Good Job!
ByYourSide chapter 1 . 3/30/2009
That was sweet. I love stories with miraculous endings.

I think the chapter breaks and the heading for the epilogue were uneccessary, because they broke up the natural flow of the story. Everything would roll along well without you saying, "Chapter One," or "Chapter Two," in my opinion. But it was still sweet. Yay Jake!