Reviews for His Private Challenge |
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![]() ![]() Came back to have a re-read H ;) How is this 11 years old now! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm so glad I found this story :) (Why can't I get ever get a guy like Michael Peterson in my life!) |
![]() ![]() I never understood why was Elliot the one the went with Lindey to the police and not Mickey. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hi, I'm just in chapter 19, but I think Lindsey and Mikey need more conflict, they seam to agree in everything, their conversations seam like an internal dialog of a person. I hope this helps. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You might want to proof read this.. But good anyways. :) |
![]() ![]() This is a great story, but you need to know when to correctly use was vs. were, wasn't vs. weren't |
![]() ![]() Sorry, this just really bugged me. Third to last line should be "We did fail at that and I'm not in love and I thought you WEREN'T" Love your story so far, (I'm a slow reader :)) and love you on ADOR. |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow...this story is so interesting! i really dont believe in love at first sight either, but hey, im 16-almost 17- years old, so i have a lot of living left to do! but, yeah...can't wait to see what goes on next! |
![]() ![]() OMG... That's a fantastic story. I'm definitly excited to read the second one in the sequel now! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story so much and actually feel close to tears that it's over. However, I am glad that you've started the Helen/Chandler story. They're everyone's favourite characters :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved this fic. I was hoping to see Chandler and Helen realize their love for each other and actually get together, but that didn't happen. So I'm excited to see you fic specifcially about them. I hope to see Lindsey and Mikey in this second fic as contributing characters. Can't wait! |
![]() ![]() ![]() WOW this story has blossomed and I'm sad I've missed so much. I can't wait for the sequels! |
![]() ![]() I loved the last few chapters. Nothing ever runs smoothly but i cant wait till the wedding :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() i love the last few chapters and how nervous Lindsey is about telling people Update soon! xx |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think that the first chapter started out a bit too quick. Don't get me wrong, your writing is wonderful, and your other readers love it. So perhaps it's just me. Anyway, try to give a little more time for development before you go off and make the main character start to fall for the other main character. (: Good luck! |