Reviews for The Alliances
Guest chapter 1 . 6/25/2013
needs to more of the story
Jojo chapter 1 . 6/7/2013
didnt really get it
Guest chapter 1 . 5/16/2013
Not particularly well written. The dialogue sounds like its passing between 60 year old english teachers, but the story seems to point to children? Also, the spelling spoils it a little bit and the characters are a bit silly
nghn chapter 1 . 4/15/2013
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Bushwah chapter 1 . 7/29/2012
A staggering number of errors, including "undeads" when "undead" is both plural and singular...

But a good fic, nevertheless.
MacBear chapter 8 . 2/25/2011
First off, you have terrible grammar. Second, plot, logic and characterisation were terrible. Third, if an adolecent girl could beat a zombie, why couldn't a grown man? Really, this story is terrible. There was no background information in the first chapter; where did the zombies come from anyway? Why are people STILL going about their lives when there are MINDLESS FLESH EATING BASTARDS out and about? You really need to improve. Oh, and the fact that your chapters are basically nothing but dialog and movements really doesn't help.
pooponastick chapter 8 . 2/25/2011
its realy good hmm maby u should make part 2 and also wat kindoff girl nam is carl
123 chapter 7 . 2/19/2011
one word ... EPIC
fdoom3 chapter 7 . 2/5/2011
OMG I love this
happywheels chapter 5 . 10/7/2010
This story is so great I can look past the bad (terrible, TERRIBLE) grammar. If this is what it takes for you to write, I don't care! I'll keep reading even if you start writing backwards...eh...sdrawkcab. HAHAHAH!
xXxXfallenxangel chapter 4 . 9/19/2010
That was really really really good! so much suspense though...anyways it's really good.
Damien Bryson chapter 1 . 6/25/2010
I found... countless grammatical errors within your story plus the description of Quebec city as being a small town.
eiyuang999 chapter 1 . 5/23/2010
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Joshua777 chapter 1 . 3/28/2010
Ah.

Too many grammer errors.

It really kills my mind to see all the grammer errors.

I didn't even read four paragraphs cos of this.

And if what the other reviewers say is true, you really need to work on your logic.
Keefin Bickmore chapter 3 . 4/16/2009
Thank you for the Background, that makes a lot more sense. I am still wondering if she is a zombie. Also your English could use some work a lot of your sentences could use some work. And i was still wondering if you could review my book Amazon.
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