Reviews for Haven's Demise
ant0006 chapter 32 . 7/14/2013
Oh my goodness, this is a great story. All the twists and turns kept me riveted, and the chemistry between David and Kristine was awesome! I honestly don't have a bad word to say about it, aside from the occasional grammatical error, and the fact that it could be confusing, and not make sense at times. But, you are definitely a very talented writer, and I hope you get published!
MonicaAlveen chapter 32 . 6/11/2013
This is a great story! Loved it!
Lyonheart91 chapter 32 . 5/31/2013
I really enjoyed this story, the only bad thing I can say is that it was a little hard to follow sometimes because it seemed like alot was going on. But it was a beautiful story and I loved how you ended it.
Jira lxiani chapter 32 . 5/24/2013
I've been reading this story for the past few daysand I'd have to say it's astounding! There were some errors here and there but then nobody is perfect. I seriously loved the chapters (even if I was about to skip this story; I'm glad I didn't!) and I love the description you put into your writings; I really did get creeped out of the skinless. I adore Charon themost, actually. You certainly changed my perspective about the reaper. Anyway, before this gets too long about all the adorableness of David and Kristine, you /have/ to publish this! Even if I read it already I just need to have this on my bookshelf soo much. Keep it up, I'll be sure to stick around and read your other works of art!
Wolflover08 chapter 32 . 4/26/2013
Oh my gosh...this story is so well thought out and detailed with explanations to everything I'd ever had questions about, the characters drawn down to the last strand that created the character, their personalities always shining through and everything was just so perfect. You could really publish this, you should publish it. It's absolutely beautiful.
BebeEllis chapter 32 . 4/22/2013
"Let me know if it..I guess left you satisfied?" Well why don't I just bang my head on the wall until you realize just how satisfying your story was. This is one of the most well written (plot wise, save for some grammar mistakes) story I've read. In terms of plot, there is always going to be gray areas no matter what kind of story and since you undertook the task of writing one in a completely different world or parallel universe, there is much to be filled and I think you accomplished that really well. The parallel universe would have been too vast to describe but what you did describe were very detailed while the outskirts beyond the school were very vague. Such a contrast worked really well with the kind of story you were writing. The settings that you gave use reflected what the demons knew and not much beyond that. There were so many questions to be asked about that world but no definite answers could be given because the characters themselves didn't know. This really helped in terms of empathy and understanding what the characters were going through. Your descriptions and details feel right, but also chaotic; there was so much detail to take in that the mind can't wrap around it and it felt almost as if I was experiencing Kristine's confusion and panic. In terms of character, I think you did a fantastic job dividing up each character's contribution to their old little group. As always, there has to be a beginning and Hamilton served as a great anchor and paternal figure to all of the other demons. His role as an adult was really well written along with his guidance and level-headedness. It was wonderful that his morphology was very different from the rest because that also distinguished his role from the rest; although his initial appearance can be frightening, he does have the warmth and softness that provided a sense of security and soothed the younger ones. Mary, Tommy, and Abigail were the ones that had to be sheltered and provided a certain innocence to the entourage. Dmitri, at the beginning, was just a question mark but as the story progressed, he sort of provided some comical relief and a dose of reality that reminded the readers of the stakes. (His constant warnings) And to even describe him? He was so unpredictable yet stable. His emotions were so obvious no matter how much he tried to hide them and his protectiveness was so commendable. His and Kristine's interactions were such high points of the story and each one became better than the next and I honest to glob LOVED when they finally connected and then some. The scene was just perfect but also reminded them of her mortality. A freaking good combination. Melted at the scenes where he would show his gentleness, especially the second time when Kristine wakes up to find her sleeping against him. Even I could feel that his embrace was secure. As for Kristine, she is such a strong character that she doesn't really need anything. I started tearing up at the last few sad, but the ending was just so bittersweet but more on the sweet side. Unlike most stories I read that feel incomplete, yours had just the right amount of loss and gain in the end. They're all battered up with so many wounds and a cherished member dead, but they're still alive and they have each other. Only slightly impractical but still heartwarming all the same. Sorry for this super long review and I hope this makes up for me not reviewing an any other chapters but I usually don't even review for stories unless I feel that they were worth the read and my time and this story was definitely worth my time. I look forward to reading your other stories since this is the first of yours I've read.
Bluemonster1845 chapter 32 . 3/18/2013
This story is definitely one of the best that I have read! It is emotional, it has action and a happy ending. I do not think, that I could ask for more! You really did an amazing job there. I do not want this story to end, but it sadly has. I am so happy that I found this story. It is definitely something that I will not forget that easily!
dreeming chapter 32 . 2/22/2013
I want to cry. This is the best thing I have ever read in a long time. Seriously, I have never gotten so sucked in a story like I did with this. You wrote some intense scenes. I was literally grabbing things and squeezing the life out of them in suspense.

Please, PLEASE publish this, and then PLEASE let me know. I NEED THIS ON MY BOOKSHELF.
breatheforlove2m chapter 32 . 2/21/2013
I am so so so sad that this story is now coming to an end, I have absolutely loved this story and this journey that I've taken with your characters. I think I might even cry now - I'm just really sad that I'm done with this story - thank you so much for writing this creative work of art. It's beautiful, funny, loving and just everything a story should be I absolutely love it. Please keep writing. :)
Erine86 chapter 32 . 2/19/2013
Woah... Amazing story. Seriosuly, I absolutly loved it. You should totally get this published. Its beyond good.
DareToSee chapter 32 . 2/19/2013

I've said this before- but I'll say it again. This is the best story I've ever read. I'm at a loss for this. Until the very end... my heart was racing. I was happy, sad, disturbed, depressed angry, in love, obsessed … and overwhelmed.

I’ve read a lot of books. More than I care to admit. But I was not prepared for a story like this. You should be proud. I’ve told you before; but this story should have a warning on it. Be prepared for every emotion. But most importantly, be prepared to come out changed.

I hope that you get this published. I know it will be more than just successful. And I can’t wait to see it in stores. Thank you for sharing this with me.

- Cathy
DareToSee chapter 31 . 2/19/2013
I am so happy and sad right now. This is the true meaning of bitter sweet, isnt it? Your whole story has been so unique... so abstract. And then for some reason I thought this chapter would be like every other ending I ever read. Where she turns away because she can't find him.. and at that last moment he appears on the sunset! haha... But you didnt fill that mold. You made it better. You gave us a taste of a different way to end a story And it was so relieving.
DareToSee chapter 30 . 2/19/2013
Nightingales... Im at a loss. This last part of this chapter... I am sitting here not clicking next. Just frozen because of what I just read. I'm also crying. Uncontrollably. And it was unbelievably poetic how you ended this. Its the exact same sentence from chapter 1. It ties this whole story into a circle. And Im at a loss from it.

When she first fell from that bridge... she was reaching for someone to save her; to spare her from her fate.

And now she's reaching for him... not wanting this fate to fade away. To not lose this man as she falls back to life
DareToSee chapter 29 . 2/19/2013
I think I understand also. Again! you remind us that this is not a fairytale. That this all has its laws and rules. The answer has been right infront of us all along. And I can see what she finally understands now.
DareToSee chapter 28 . 2/19/2013
what... what!

How can you seriously do that? Oh god- I am so strung out. I think I need to sleep... It's 5 am after all.
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