|Reviews for Haven's Demise|
| DareToSee chapter 27 . 2/19/2013
I feel sick. When she was reading the journal about the other's who died- all the while hearing Hamiltons claws clacking as he paced around them. It seriosuly upset me. This story is unbelievably amazing... and haunting. One should be warned you'll come out of this a changed person.
| DareToSee chapter 26 . 2/19/2013
NOT ALONE. *shuddders* If your goal was to give me the creeps- you suceeded! But again- I am awed by your writing; how you describe things!
"…I was forgetting something.
The dirt beneath me watched me back. I tore through my mind and tried to hold onto what felt like a fading dream. I could barely comprehend an edge of it- I was aware that it was still on the surface of my subconscious and I reeled with all my might to bring it back forth to awareness instead of drifting beneath a darkness; into a place I would never find. But yet, it was something my body hadn't let go of since the beginning… probably the only reason why I realized my mind was missing something. I used that as the chain to keep my vanishing thought afloat. My nerves raced against the phantom reflection that was once there, and somewhere deep inside of me, I made a bridge that carried it back over to my thoughts."
I love that. Honestly, its no where even close to your best. But its still your writing style, and I love it. After reading this paragraph I thought to myself... how would I have been able to explain that? And I realized I wouldnt have been able to! At least not well!
| DareToSee chapter 25 . 2/19/2013
wow. So many things about this chapter that i loved. and one of this was while she was looking at her soul. I love to read fantasies and magial books, and I just excepted them as magic. And fairtales! I didnt question the laws of nature while Harry Potter levitated his books haha. And then here... we have what seems to be random paranormal events and happenings.
Until this chapter. You bring her.. us (the reader)... out of the fairytale. You remind us that the universe is still here. And this enegery... this "burn" isn't mythical. Its logical. BRILLIANT!
Oh... and then the chapter continues and I get scared out of my socks and have to turn on the lights! Thanks... And now I'm thinking this "storm" is going to be a bad one.
| DareToSee chapter 24 . 2/19/2013
This was a very sweet chapter. I got caught up in it along with Kristine. I felt like it was a nice breather; even for me the reader. For a few moments- you could just enjoy the company of your characters... know a little more about them... and most of all- have a pause from all the emotions that breed because of this story. But then, at the end, even before you said it. I knew something was going to happen, I realized the for-shadowing of this chapter. And then I read Kristine's words as she realized that a spring of fate was tightening... that these peacfuly moments she was living were actually "The quiet before the storm."
| DareToSee chapter 23 . 2/19/2013
Whoa... Yeah that would do it. Kind of a sad chapter. Usually you hate the other woman. But here... I realized her true feelings. And it made me want some sort of happy ending for her lol. I'm a wierdo like that :P
| MilkyWaySora chapter 7 . 2/14/2013
Very sad '(
| MilkyWaySora chapter 3 . 2/13/2013
Demons, the Devil's angels, I've always felt had more control over the water then any other element. The connection you made with it is intriguing.
| MilkyWaySora chapter 2 . 2/13/2013
Again, very good! Still a few errors, but it's not too bad.
Loving all the visuals the words create!
| MilkyWaySora chapter 1 . 2/13/2013
This is beautifully written! You painted such a visual for the reader!
There were a few errors, but they did not take away anything from the story.
| cloud9cas chapter 32 . 2/1/2013
I cried... cried and cried and cried! What a wonderfully beautiful story! You always had me on my toes and many times I was at a loss. There are definitely portions which an editor would really help to clarify but never fear, they are quite small and I was always able to find my way back again.
This was so very intricate and I wondered at the Greek at the top but seeing as I read all of it in three days (if that, honestly) I didn't take the time to go to Google and translate it, so I am glad that you translated it at the very end. I think that was a very clever move.
I hope to write a story filled with such strong emotion as this. I am working on a few ideas and I hope once I start publishing them, you might have a chance to take a small cursory glance over them at least.
I need to favorite this story so I can come back and read it again sometime... I really did absolutely love it- it was so well balanced between romance, suspense and, I'll admit, I was from time to time horrified by the images you painted so exquisitely with your words.
I look forward to any other writings you may have in store! 3
| mylittleprincess chapter 32 . 1/31/2013
Wow! amazing and awsome story ever, well done :)
| AR Kenny chapter 32 . 1/24/2013
This is an AMAZING story! This needs to be published! I would buy this story. Top story in my book.
| CaBlasch87 chapter 1 . 1/17/2013
wow, very descriptive. Good work!
| Rae Kitano chapter 31 . 1/3/2013
Wow, I could not believe it when I saw this last chapter. This is one story I have always longed for the ending and I seriously feared I would never read it. Well done, a magnificent ending to a magnificent story.
Have you ever considered self publishing, it's very easy to do now and your story would do extremely well on Kindle or other sites like that.
Good luck and thank you so much for finishing this story, it has been one of my all time favourites.
| Theboxbot chapter 31 . 12/31/2012
Okay, I've read lots of stories in my short 16 years of life.
But this is something I have never even come close to reading before.
Let me start off with it's beautiful. I love this story so much.
The details had an actual effect on me.
Shivers, cringes, fluttering of my heart.
It was like a wild roller coaster ride.
I commend you, this was a beautifully written piece.
It's quite amazing how you delivered this story perfectly with glorious attention to every single detail regarding personality, surroundings and those heart racing moments.
There have been only a few stories that moved me to subtle tears.
You were not one of those authors.
Because you had me bawling for quite some time compared to short little tears.
Please do continue writing, it's a beautiful thing.