How is she gonna tell her parents!

Cool.

Hope you write more.

I reckon you're like me, most of the story is said out aloud.

Go, go.

Kayla Brown

Great story. Interesting storyline and great characters.

This chappie was awesome~!

But, I'm thinking that it's not *his* is it?

(HeJake)

Awesome story! i loved it! Um, one quick suggestion though, I don't know if you proofread before you publish your stories, but it might be a good idea. cuz some of the sentences didn't seem to mold together, and flow as easily as they should. anyway, that's my one suggestion. other than that great story and please please keep writing!

Hm. So does the story end here? Or does it sort of, continue on as we find out what happens to James?

AH!

It's awesome. Write more, please. *pleading puppy eyes*

Everyone loves a fast-updater, esp. me! XD

YAYA! they finally together :D i love this chapter :D Hm i hope they are together forever...

woah, she moves FAST, doesn't she.

To be perfectly honest with you she sounds like a hee-uge slut if she's just met a guy like a couple of hours ago and she invites him to her house.

It seems a bit immature how he just looks at her and she's like, 'ah, he's so beautiful and mesmerizing'. Don't get me wrong cos I do like the story, and this is meant to be constructive crtisism, but it might be coming off too harsh.

I'm going to keep reading, but just thought I'd let you know what I thought about the first chapter.

you're not a bad writer though

Bee

Aw...this was a sweet chapter. I feel so bad for Jake. His family died. Anyways, I absolutely love Jake and I'm glad they're friends again. Make sure you update soon.

Hey! It's me again. Ermm yeah. I don't exacly know why i'm reviewing under chapter one, but the ficpress thing says I already reviewed chapter 8, telling you this was too much like Twilight, but I did that LAST chapter so it's not my fault! Anyway, you're right! This ISN'T like Twilight. It really is different. Poor Jake. It's so sad. His PARENTS died. What is he packing for anyway? Just wondering. But this is REALLY good of chapter. Too bad it wasn't longer though. Darn. Haha. Well, update quickly because I cannot wait to know what happens next. And again, you're right, I'm wrong, it's NOT like Twilight!

:( That was sad. They're dead. What's happening to Jake? Maybe you wrote it but I just missed it but what's happening to Jake?

I've read Twilight and it did remind me of it but that's okay. I'm super excited to see (read) how you're going to continue this. I just love Jake. I want to hug him too! ahaha anyway, still waiting for an update. Please do check out my stories too :)

Okay. I hate to break it to you. But this chapter is basically a complete copy-cat of Twilight. If your going to COPY twilight. You have to give a disclaimer giving credit to Stephenie Meyer's ideas. And again, it's just TOO twilight. If you planned on doing that, you should have put this story under under book/Twilight.

Really, Super, good! Update soon for me! Not much to say about this chapter, other than, how can you have DARK BLONDE hair?