i thought this was really well written, it was original and a very good read - thanks!

This was cute! I liked it :)

But I think Seth should've said something about why he beats Kyle up everyday.

Very smexy and delicious. I'm not sure how you couldmimprove it actually...

I cant saying anything right now because im trying to clean up from my massive nosebleed! That was awesome! Though, I was extremely surprised to see Kyle as the seme. I expected him to be 100 percent uke. It worked none the less.

Loved it! Along with some of your other one-shots I've read. You're really talented D. You spelt "scared" (like frightend) wrong though, you spelt it "scarred" like marked. Just thought you wanna know since you said to point out any mistakes P. Really really loved it!

~Kimmi

I really liked that and if you're a beginner with a long way to go you'll be amazing when you're there! :)

Hello!

I just finished your story! It was awesome! I just like this type of plot! But your writing and the characters made your story special somehow!

Gosh, my eyes hurts...But it was just so good. I couldn't help snuggle in my bed, shut down the light and dive in this story...

The dialogue were nice. The descriptions so precise. Well, a really really good story! I'll check your other ones tomorrow!

Anyway, thanks for this little break I really needed from real life! And keep on writing! (for the reader's pleasure mainly of course :p)

i hope you do write an accompanying one shot cause i loved both of the boys...is so different from all those stories i read and the fact that the jock is for once the bottom is refreshing in a way..really good..i quite liked the sex scene..it had a hint of humor in it that changed the mood and i liked the change...overall it was pretty good..:)

:) good story, kyle is an interessting character, not the clichee victim. it's good that he took the lead...

but... i think the story would be better, if you would describe Seth's two weeks absense. it would clear some things, because the reader is left thinking what purpose the two weeks had, other to symbolize the change of Seth's actions. it would also be better, i think, if they woluld have a conversation, a few sentences probably, when they finally meet at the end. a few explenations from Seth would be very fitting. not clicheed ones like "i let them beat you, because i could not suppress my growing attachment", but characretistical Seth one.

keep writing :)

OH MY GOD

why would you want to change ANYTHING?

its perfect _

like...beautiful

and sexy

and slash(!)

and just...fantabulous

haha i love it - dont change a thing

loved it! teehee

that is my favorite yaoi pairing you did a good job i enjoyed it

:D :D :D :D hehe... im such a weirdo for loving this so much, but i dont care :p Honestly, this is one of the best slash fics I've read. It really is. The twist was interesting and I love the way you described the characters and the story. The sex scene.. well that is self explanatory :). Thank you so much for taking the time to write this! I really appreciate it! Don't stop writing these stories, because they really ARE good.

i guarantee i will read this more than once-russlove

so here it is. I liked it until I found out who was on top. I'm not saying its not good, because it is good though it was hard to tell who was saying what at times. You don't see many people who want to top people who are bigger than them. If your into the muscley getting topped by what I assume is the svelt type well good for you.

Not as cliche as I expected.

Wow, for a first time you did very well. I loved the story, it was full of emotion and the ending was totally hot ;] Poor Kyle though, I think Seth has a LOT of making up to do P

Great job! Thanks for the read!