Reviews for Hidden
Chasing Skylines chapter 1 . 4/12/2009
Very nice imagery.

[She randomly kicked at a cluster of the weeds and sent them flying, continuing on her pointless quest of destruction.]

I could imagine this, as well as her other actions so far.

[“What is a weed?” She asked the field.]

Attributive tag. Should be "she," uncapitalized.

[“Same difference.” Emma refuted.]

If you're using 'refute' as an attributive tag (speech tag), then the period after difference should be a comma.

[“What makes you so different?”]

That line seemed so poignant.

Aw, that was touching. Nice piece, and I liked the characterization of Emma.

Good luck in WCC.
Duckies chapter 1 . 4/12/2009
Aww that was just so touching!

I thought the line: "a deep voice said behind her" was a bit redundant, as you'd already mentioned footsteps coming up from behind. Apart from that, really really loved it! It just hit home for me *teardrop* Would be great if you ever chose to expand on this story :)

Good luck for the WCC!
Dreamweaver38 chapter 1 . 4/9/2009
aw Sheriff!

I'm crying! That was beautiful! So touching!

I love it!
Lea Ai chapter 1 . 4/8/2009
Sweet and uplifting. A very touching story. The last line was very poetic...I loved it.
effervescent-sentiments chapter 1 . 4/8/2009
Aww. Sweet. Some of the imagery was a little overwrought and overdone, but overall I really liked the mood of the piece. I'd love to see this developed more. I'll put it on story alert just in case you decide to. :)

Jules
Fractured Illusion chapter 1 . 4/8/2009
“What makes you so different?”

Wow, that line just hit me you know. Just... BAM! Out of nowhere. I liked it. Very emotional there.

Nice piece, good luck in WCC! :D

Frac