Reviews for revelation |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I love your word choice - you had a fantastc haunting, creepy quality to the poem, and your descriptions carried some really good imagery with them. I love how you used viscous and viciously really closely together; that was very clever, because it looked cool and rhymed at the same time. Not to mention, 'viscous' is one of my favourite words xD I like that this was nicely structured into proper stanzas, and the rhythm that you managed to maintain, even without a particular rhyme scheme or pattern. Fab work! -Beatrice, from the review marathon |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hm. Very interesting. Your tone is what I like best in this. It hints at a lot of things that you don’t say; it sounds like kind of like thoughtful sarcasm. :) I like your stanzas. They’re well formed and clean –simple. Your lines are wonderful, too. The words you used have a haunting quality to them that I really liked for this. Plus, the descriptions are very vivid. And just to mention it, I think in the second stanza, you used vicious/viciously almost next to each other; you probably just overlooked that. I have people tell me that all the time. I liked the third stanza the best: Eyes, a smiling mouth. Teeth. From inside out the emptiness claws and slowly takes the shape of a grotesque face but it is only a mask: don't be afraid. The broken-up thought between “Eyes, a smiling mouth. Teeth.” I thought sounded amazing in the poem. And the line you used as your summary is so well written. I love the imagery in that. Thanks for posting! I loved it. :D -Peach, from the Review Marathon (link’s in the profile!) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really liked this, It didn't really have any rhyme scheme but the words still flowed. I loved the second line... |
![]() ![]() ![]() well this is a little bit creepy, not to mention of dubious seasonal collocation. keen. |