Reviews for oh honey, you're so cool
SakuraLoveXox chapter 1 . 4/11/2009
i liked it... very interesting poem. nice job :)
alkfhdakjd1 chapter 1 . 4/11/2009
Definitely an intriguing piece, I like your style. This is a great poem, it flows very well, and I like the lack of punctuation - usually I don't, but you've made it fit here (except for the last stanza - 'oh you're lying dead' sounded very abrupt. Adding just one comma: 'oh, your're lying dead' seems to adjust the flow nicely, though that's only in my opinion).
diffident chapter 1 . 4/11/2009
Interesting poem; I like the progression from peace to paranoia to (metaphorical?) death. But the last stanza pales in comparison to the previous ones. The flow isn't as smooth and it doesn't roll off the tongue like the first and second. Also, I think some punctuation could improve this poem too.

Keep writing!

marie
lymli chapter 1 . 4/11/2009
kinda ironic...

I like the last verse.