Reviews for The Wicked Pair
ByYourSide chapter 1 . 5/17/2009
Eerie and dark, "horror" indeed. I only understood the beginning, though. I'm confused: the girl's only friend? Who would that be?

"Silently she came upon the ghastly scene,

In equal manner attempted she to flee,"

Did her brother murder her friend? Or did her brother murder her? I like the rhyming at the end, and I like the style, gothic story-telling. But I'm confused about what actually transpired.

"Dutifully, she lifted her nightgown allowing her brother to relieve himself before tiptoeing back to his room.

She’d grown accustomed to these brief visits.

By the age of 15 she looked forward to them."

I like how you wrote that. It's horrifying, realistic, and fits well with the rest of the poem. :)
Kalista Jia chapter 1 . 4/14/2009
wow this is... interesting. lol.

Dark and incestious I guess.

You describe the whole build-up well.

Nice job.

Kalista Jia
Sakina the Fallen Angel chapter 1 . 4/14/2009
Gosh...this reminds me of Baudelaire topic-wise...pretty shocking, yet the way it is written gives it...a...I don't know..."delicious and delicate" air to it? Now I'm worried for myself...and for thinking that!

A wonderfully sinful poem, and nice rhyming in the last stanza! :P

~ Sakina x