amazing story! There were just a few things...

Firstly, at the beginning of the book she developed her gifts slowly and then a few chapters later she was doing a lot better. I'm just a bit curious about that, because it seemed to go from nothing to something that was kinda good in not much time.

I really liked how she kinda got settled in before she went on a mission. Some people just jump into the main plotline in the first chapter, and their stories are short. Actually, yours is the longest I've read so far!

I also noticed your paragraphs are messed up a bit. Another one of the things that bothers me is when you see

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that's supposed to be on the line above. I don't know why it bothers me, but it just does.

I like how in the last few chapters first her "dead" friend tells her secrets and you think that the confession is all over... and then the next chapter when you find out that there was even more that he was keeping from her!

I think you need to talk about her friend more in the beginning of the book. I was surprised with the ending, but I think you should show in the beginning how nice and awesome he is in her opinion. This sounds strange, but I like it when you don't want to re-read a book with someone in it who's evil but pretending to be good because you know what happens and what their real motives are. Does that make sense?

Sorry if I seem to be picking everything bad to talk about. I'm kinda big on constructive criticism...

I love your writing style! You always give just the right amount of details!

Keep up the great work!

Tarah xXx

hey,

ur story is amazing. is kade going to get together with talia? And is bennet dead or is going to come back?

I have to say I really enjoyed the ride this story took me on. It was interesting and hip. I liked the characters and the ending made it easy to continue a story. They were also many twists I did not see coming, especially the part about Bennett/Issac, I was kinda expecting something of it but all the details were just, wow. Great story, can't wait to read all the other parts.

Man I really love this story. This should be made into a tv series. It's very interesting and I would watch it in a heart beat.

Teen outcast story. No matter how many times i read them I will always like them, especially if their as good written as this. So far I really like Talia, feisty and with personality.

Yeah, Pauletta needs her ass majorly kicked... perhaps have her clothing blown up, while she's wearing them.

What the HELL was the point of bringing up the boyfriend that was ripped away from Talia... other than just to hurt her, of course?

~Pix~

So what happens if she refuses to cooperate? Its not like they're gonna kill her, and they've already taken away everything/everyone she cares about so there is nothing to threaten her with and no one to hold hostage... so why doesn't she just refuse the torture and abuse they call training?

I would, but then I HATE being ordered or TOLD what to do, if someone ASKS, I will give them the world, but demands get them nowhere. But that's probably due to the abusive alcoholic I grew up with.

~Pix~

Angst at the END? Oh if I were her I'd want to kick Paulette's ass. FIRST she interrupted her first kiss, SECOND she canceled her first date, THIRD she allowed the enemy to steal her only friend/boyfriend, and FINALLY she ruined her birthday... I'd be wanting to kick some serious butt and Paulette seems to be a good target as she is so cold, unfeeling, and just plain bitchy.

In fact, I'd be pretty damned pissed at ALL of them for taking away her choice and free-will, for FORCING her into training and into a life she never asked for or wanted... In reality, they have made her into a PRISONER in the name of "saving" her. Oh yeah, I'd be LIVID.

But whatever, I guess you want her to be weak and meek and go along with whatever THEY have planned for her life.

~Pix~

hey i just want to tell you that i read your entire story a while ago but i couldnt review bcus my computer was messed up...

but now ive got a new laptop and i just wanna say i loved your story and im gonna read the second one now..!

:)

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Your story is amazing. Can't wait for the sequel. :)

UPDATE fats.

Em, what else can I say but “Well done!”? From a technical point of view, you have honoured your readers by not allowing any spelling mistakes or syntax errors appear in the story (not that I wouldn’t read it if this was the case, but it makes things more pleasant).

Now, onto the story: I liked the fact that it is complete, and that I did not find one interesting story that was abandoned by its writer in the middle because he/she could not update for whatever reason.

I liked the plot. I liked that the characters have shortcomings and faults despite that fact that they are protagonists in a supernatural story, where they could be near- godlike. I like the fact that they are human and that they have depths and layers. I like the fact that the general confusion that governs the human psyche in the teenage years is present and obvious by the way your characters are behaving.

As you can see, I like many things! And the thing I liked the most is that there is a part 2, and that there will be a part 3 as well.

And I would like to ask you a question that has been bugging me since yesterday: If a purely Divine and a partly Divine individual have a children, will some of the children be purely Divine and some partly Divine according to the laws of genetics, or will all of them be partly Divine or something else?

Cheers!

Hello!

I just finished your story and I have to say that it was awsome!

I'm goning right now to your profile to search fot the second part.

How many books are you planing on for this series?

Anyway, great job!

I love this story/world you created! I read the whole thing straight through, because I could not stop! And I've never genuinely laughed so much before. Your humor is really smartly written, because it just fits so naturally in the story. Most stories rely on sarcastic dialogue for laughs and it just seems so abrupt or gimmicky, but not yours! Bravo and keep writing, please!

Is it bad if I kind of want Isaac to kidnap Talia? You know, for like, his own romantic/sexual reasons. Because I do.

I seem to seriously enjoy guys being villains...