I absolutely loved it! Which there was more. Now I got to go check out Wattpad

I think the only mistake I saw consistently was "mind as well" which should be "might as well". But maybe it is a colloquial term. This was a really good story. I appreciate the depth in the characters and the plot twists.

joshua and christopher are smart

"Alright, back to mitochondria." This one really cracked me up. :P

i like your story! heart pumping really! wow.

olive this story! I've been looking for an ice hockey story for ages and I've finally found. you should write some more *wink, wink*

strong female character good story

the aunty is a cow. LOVE IT!

Love it! she is such a strong character you've done well. I know the perpous of each character and its sticking. Keep it up.

Ohhh, CONFLICT! ahhh cant weight to see what happens next.

good! id love them to be longer but they're amazing. really well written.

love it! she's so driven! amazing.

Yes! that was good. Characters were strong, i really want to find out what happens next.

Love the humour. You just need to find your place with jess. I get that she's going into a new school but is she kick ass or is she a shy, girly girl who wants to try out for childrearing. Find your place and then youll be getting somewhere.

Nice. I love the way you're building up the characters. You're doing well.