Reviews for jake
fairies and snapple chapter 1 . 9/27/2009
As is this. The way it goes back and forth, and seems so honest and pleading and wanting is just amazing.
young and the reckless chapter 1 . 5/5/2009
i love the format,

so very awesome.

"i love, love, love you…is that okay?"

is so sweet, so vulnerable, so real.

great job.
nevermore199 chapter 1 . 4/22/2009
I think I commented on DeviantArt that I loved this poem. And I still do love it. :) Great job!
EmptySecrets chapter 1 . 4/21/2009
Amazing - I love the words you use and how you use them. :) How do you get the paragraphs to not have space inbetween each line? I've been trying, and I seem to consistently fail.
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 4/21/2009
Your writing has a wonderful girlish whimsicality to it. I could completly feel the emotions that you wanted to display.

It's a strong comparision with the fluid, matter-of-fact stanza's, and the parts that are {} which display a softer, unsure narration. I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work.

Much love,