Great story! I loved your writing!

Beautifully written, and you're right, the perspective is different, but I like that. You've shown the new girlfriend as the victim instead of the mother, and it seems to have worked. :D Great one-shot.

in the beggining i was a bit confused because i didnt understand how u had written it - but then as i continued on i understood and really liked it

charlotte

Hey!

I was just browsing around looking up random stories when I stumbled across this one. It's an honest, creative work and it's really good. I loved how the feeling of happiness slowly became bitter and then how it slowly towards the end became bittersweet. Keep writing!

This is really good. I love the different take on things. )

~Kimmi

I liked this story. It shows a side that some people don't even think about. It reminds me of my sister and her husband, so I know the "mother" isn't always the victim.

That was great! It's stories like THIS that make me love, love, LOVE writing. This is what it's all about. You, the author, getting people to think outside of their preconceived notions.

I love it.

Keep up writing.

I really like this! IT's really interesting and sad. Good job!

Oh wow. I really like this. It's very original. Like you noted at the end, i thought it was gonna be about the woman he left. Haha imagine my surprise when its the woman he left her for. Well either woman, it was good writing:)

This was Great! My husband does that twitch thing too when he falls asleep. LOL!

And, I am his second wife, so I can relate to this story, and his first wife made his life..., well, I don't use that kind of language. She turned his kids against him, lots of court battles, but that was all before I met him. The damage was there, though.

I can't relate to feeling like I missed out on the "firsts" though. He would say that God gave him back everything he lost - a wife and 2 more sons!

I love your stories and I actually had a little bit of an intelligent conversation with someone recently about racing motorcycles (her brother is into that) - and all I knew was from your stories! LOL

I absolutely love it and totally get where it's coming from. Beautiful. Hope someone else gets to read it...

Spectacular. You could have gone Maury but you went classy. Nice work.

A Sweet story. And I always do find one-shots a great way to think of something when you have writer's block