Nice job, great descriptions...

It's a nice beginning. Complicated and gripping til the very last word.

I want to read more. I really love this. Nice work with everything such as, well, the idea of that this person was dying of a heartbreak and not a sickness.

It makes me think of a surrealistic dream, or maybe an impressionistic one, it is, afterall, how you see the world not how I see it.

Much love,

Juliet.