|Reviews for Shooting Light|
| Chasing Skylines chapter 1 . 4/25/2009
[The memory still makes my heart ache and I wondered will my premonition would come true.]
Awkward phrasing. Either "I wondered[, needs a comma] will my premonition come true" or "I wondered whether my premonition would come true."
[Its white tail left a trail of light behind it briefly lighting the dark sky, but fading.]
Missing a comma after it.
[first start I see tonight.]
Start should be "star."
I like the couplet at the end.
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