|Reviews for Empty Canvas|
| fleur de l'est chapter 1 . 5/5/2009
Well done :D 2 quick points though:
-practicing practising (although I'm not sure, it might just be the English spelling; in England practice is the noun and practise the verb, it might be different in America / Malaysia '?)
-There also seems to be a problem with the layout - the alignment seems a bit erratic and the 1st line seems to be isolated. Or this could be deliberate?
Otherwise I loved this poem very much. I didn't understand it until the very last verse, so suspense well created there, and the last line ties everything together. The first two verses are beautiful and the third verse forms a painful contrast against it. I like the way you made the story tell itself, and then concluded it with a metaphor ) Very poetic approach.