Reviews for Loneliness
LostInMe chapter 1 . 5/3/2009
This is good! The rhythm is lovely, the descriptions original. My favorite stanza is the third - very nicely worded. I love the way you refer to blood as red/crimson tears.
Isca chapter 1 . 5/1/2009
"I can show what's here inside: a monster." This line is so striking and sad-allowing the reader to gain access to the very depths of the speaker's inner-turmoil.

"For to feel love is to feel pain." This emotional-binary does seem to enjoy each other's company, unfortunately.

"I put a bullet in my head." Devastating!

I loved the ending-death is freedom? Thought-provoking!

lymli chapter 1 . 5/1/2009
this reminds me when one has nothing to do in weekend, great poem.
SilentVoices chapter 1 . 5/1/2009
I liked this very much, it was concise and to the point. The only thing that I did not really like was the wording of 'from out my vein/from out my eyes'.
MasqueradeAngel chapter 1 . 5/1/2009
Wow...that was very intense. It made you feel so many things at once, which is hard to do. So congrates! really enjoyed this if you didnt already guess that...)