|Reviews for and a blush|
| drops of rain chapter 1 . 7/10/2009
I thought it was pretty obvious it was about the sun, actually. "The night's here"
Very nice. I like how universal it is. :D
| Nicki BluIs chapter 1 . 6/26/2009
Hmm. I can see where this could be a reference to the sunset but its' not clear. I don't like that the summary seems to be intentionally misleading. In fact much of the peom seems to be straying the reader to think of a woman. The imagery is distinctly human rather than sky.
I also don't like the aparrant diconnet between the two stanzas. It makes perfect sense if you tihnk of it as a sunset - but I didn't. So I spent quite a bit of time tring to justify the blushing and the goodbye.
Thanks agian for your RM contributions!
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| tangerine dreamer chapter 1 . 6/13/2009
this is short, sweet, and very clever. i'm not sure i would've known it was about the sunset if you hadn't written and author's note. however, i love the metaphor, it fits perfectly.
in terms of criticism, i would just like to have seen more, maybe more descriptions, because it does seem a little short. the sunset is so beautiful and there is so much more that can be said. but then again, that's just my opinion.
nicely done, keep it up!
| Isca chapter 1 . 6/1/2009
I love the fact that the sunset 'blushed'-it's as if the sun's a woman and her lover's the darkness. It was very cute and romantic, in my opinion. :)
| ArekuKawaii chapter 1 . 5/15/2009
I like that is it cute and short. I think if it was any longer it would be demeaning on the meaning of a blush. The last two lines however seem somewhat out of place. Not sure why, but when reading they lose the flow a little.
It is very true though. It made me smile about myself.
| Manifest-Destiny-x X chapter 1 . 5/7/2009
I really like the length of it, because any more and it would detract from the simplicity and any less, there would be nothing there.
I would would re-word "Staining creamy color pink." to 'Staining the creamy color with pink' in order to make it flow better. Also I would make "night's" 'night is.' My reasoning consists of the fact that the rest of the poem sounds fairly formal, and then you get to that part and find a bit of cognitive dissonance.
| Grains and Oats chapter 1 . 5/2/2009
Yep...That pretty much sums it up.
Excellent, though short, piece.
Thanks for the review! [[I have issues with stanzas :P]]
| In the Rye chapter 1 . 5/2/2009
i just wish it weren't so short.