D'aw. I absolutely loved how she wasn't feigning sleep. There is a sense of reality, a dash of cliche and come on now, who doesn't love immature boys? The writing was clean, lucid and enjoyable. Kudos to you!

(Call Me Betty)

I might really utterly and completely adore reading your story.
I really liked the fact that it the protagonist was anonymous, but I wasn't so fond the swearwords/cussing.
I felt like the character, Carla, could be fleshed out a bit more.
I'm looking forward to reading your next piece of work.

I usually don't review, but the little review format at the end of your story was so cute haha. I liked the way this was written, and the character voice. Now I will go read something else you wrote so good job!

Hay, I love reading your story.
I really liked, his sence of humour, but I wasn't so fond of the cliffhanger (he didn't really tell her he loved her, what happens next!).
I look forward to your next piece of work.
name your gold fish Lossie

Hey I really liked your

Dumb boy.

This would be an epic long story! I'm a sucker for the best friend cliché! But as it is I'm just going to have to use my imagination and pretend that after a few bumps in the road Carla realises she loves him too and it all ends happily ever after :)

I really liked reading this story. It was really cute, but I wish you kept going with it instead of just ending it like you did. Nicely done!

Haha.. i liked the way you defied the cliche of the person pretending to be asleep all along. The ending is good but kinda makes me wanna have an epilogue!

The note at the end had me laughing ] As for the story, I kind of sort of may have loved it. Cute, but definitely sad (

so carla want in love with him? aww thats sad. i liked the way that carla was so human and he still found her hot!

This was really cute. (: The characters make me smile. It's sort of sad that he can't tell her, but I like to think that he'll get to it someday. Good job!

Sexy. :).

Hey, I enjoyred reading your story.

I really liked Carla and , but I wasn't so fond of the teddy bear. :p

I felt like the character of the teddy bear was ominously (whatever that means) portrayed.

I'm looking forward to your next piece of work.

very good one-shot. : I love the guy! He's hesitant yet cocky in a way! Haha! He needs to get a life. :) Anyway, this is really good.

lol! what's with the firstborn pet goldfish? :