Reviews for I Can't Follow You, My Friend
dail-of-the-air chapter 1 . 8/29/2010
Very good. But perhaps better not as poetry, but as a sort of poetic prose. Your syntax and vocabulary are very suited towards a more poetic prose rather than poetry, but I can see why you put this into poem form.

A few grammar mistakes: in lines 7 and 8, "besides you" should be "beside you"; line 11, "who" should be "whom".

Excellent job of expressing emotion. You'd do very well in character writing - the speaker is so fleshed out in so few words. Your poetry ideas seem to revolve around war and the feelings associated with it, and you do a very good job with it. Keep up the good work!
2347982095 chapter 1 . 5/10/2009
If that ever happened to me I'd simply cry. XD I love mine too much lol. That was well put together, the emotions were evident.
Snowflakes Are Drifting chapter 1 . 5/9/2009
very well written, i wouldn't want to go to war ethier
MasqueradeAngel chapter 1 . 5/9/2009
This was very well written. I loved the feeling you put into it.