|Reviews for Forgotten Moon|
| addicted2cocoa chapter 1 . 5/29/2009
At first glance this seems like a simple poem but you’ve created some very strong imagery. I particularly liked the line “Whistles of the wind,” the alliteration is very effective; you can almost hear the sound as you say it.
Another particularly strong image is the line “Ate the moon and vanished,” the words are quite relentless and unforgiving; it’s like nature’s come alive.
Overall I think this is a good effort, but there’s also something about it that seems a bit childish in its approach.
| EstrelyaSpica chapter 1 . 5/11/2009
Wow great poem
you improved well
I could imagine the event