Dont know why I kept seeing the female lead as paris hilton lol! Probably with the way she was described she seemed to me like a paris hilton character sometimes haha!(though I dont and never will like paris :$) Glad she has opened up to kissing and not just random fucks, its so weird to say that.

wow dat was sweet nd he actually tamed herr good one :)

I really... really... love this...

You most definitely need to right a longer story with this type of chemistry. It would be great. You really built the tension quite well. I'm excited to read some of your other stuff! Nice job.

hahaha i should try making a bet like that

Not so bad, not so bad :p Strange things she compared kissing to, though. Aren't swirls the same things as fireworks? It's all figurative anyway. But I liked! So nice work.

Considering you're still learning English, this is really good English. I think you just need a beta to comb through it, though, since some wrong words are used (though I get what you're trying to say).

Very cliche but also cute and damn they have a lot of chemistry. XD I'm very glad woodstock1969 added this to our c2. (:

Awh~!

This was really cute. Good job. _

Sometimes, I wonder if people who are learning English as a second language, are better at writing than those who have known and learned English their whole lives.

Seeing as if you learn English as a second language, speaking and writing will be grammatically correct, and it will be a habit. Whereas if we have known English our whole lives, we pick up habits and speak incorrectly.

It was brilliant. Especially for someone who is learning English as a second language (which sort of contradicts what I just said...but, who cares).

I loved it. I am going to favourite it for you. :)

That was really good..

liked it a lott!

I really enjoyed this and it had a good flow to it. It was very creative and I love the relationship between them. Jed sounds really sweet. I also loved how you had same rules for both genders. I hate stories about how the girl is so innocent and the guy never is. It is very refreshing to read a story that is real. You did a great job for someone learning English. There were some words that were odd for example you used intensive and I think intense would have been better. This is definitely going on my favorites.

Rating - 9 :)

It's very sweet, I really liked it and it was very well written. And about the spelling mistakes I don't really think I saw any...apart from the word thrust instead of trust but I think that it adds humour :)

you're in the process of learning english? wow, never would have guessed. And I thought the story was sweet xD

aw this was so cute )

i like it

it's got a very good plot line

and although there are some mistakes

it's understable because you're still learning english :)

i liked it though

i liked it a lot :)

izzie

Amazing story !

Its like nothing i've ever read before :)

I love it .

Love and support ;

saraelle .