|Reviews for Of Proud Spirits and Losses at Night
| Pennedbyme chapter 5 . 9/20/2023
It's ticking along nicely.. good work you've done so far! I like the way they're antagonising each other.
| Guest chapter 5 . 1/22/2020
I'm liking this! Midnight reading for me, so nothing constructive, but just wanted to give kudos :)
| Brightheart chapter 38 . 8/19/2014
I loved this story...
I'm sorry to hear about this other person plagiarizing your work...
| thatweirdgurl97 chapter 38 . 4/23/2014
Don't let plagiarism get yo you! this is an amazing novel and I sincerely give you all the credit that you deserve and more.
| Tanairy Cornelio chapter 37 . 1/23/2014
Wow this story was amazing i love how real the characters are, i was really annoyed with Lilianna for a while but i started liking her more towards the end when she started to loosen up a little and i love William he was such a gentleman :) oh and i love how accurate you are with everything from the way they spoke in that time and the way they dressed and basically how things worked and i know you worked really hard on this story and it paid off because it was amazing!
Im so sad and cried for Kayleigh and i wish that at least one of the men she loved survived :( poor Harrison i really wish he would have survived because he was so sweet and he had so many good things going for him, and poor Sean if only he at least tried to survive and not thought the situation wasn't serious, but anyways what you did is realistic because i'm sure when it really happened people have lost like Kayleigh and felt alone. i do hope she finds happiness and someone like harrison because she really deserves it. In a way i kind of hoped she made up with Phillip because then maybe she would have someone unless he left again.
I'm very happy that william is going to school to become a lawyer and doing what he wanted to do and i'm happy him and Lillianna are finally happy together. And as for Anne what she did was not very good but i'm at least happy she's going to be a mother like she always wanted to :). for Williams family i did feel kind of bad about Samuel when William knocked him unconscious and left him there to die and even though he brought it on himself its still kind of sad :(
This was a great story and at first i wasn't going to read it just because it was about Titanic and i didn't think i could handle reading it knowing what would happen to the ship and that i was going to cry and be sad about characters that didn't make it, and also because i just think its such a sad tragedy but i'm glad i decided to read it anyways :) Thanks so much for writing this and i'm so sorry that your story was plagiarized that really sucks. (sorry this review was so long)
| Ria chapter 18 . 1/14/2014
Meep... It's getting slightly irking how long it's taking Lilianna to tell William about her pregnancy.
| FairyTaleDreams chapter 38 . 12/15/2013
I think it's awful that someone has stolen the credit for this story from you. I'm just completely speechless - it was so amazingly well written! Kudos to you. And I hope you keep writing!
| Saloni chapter 38 . 9/29/2013
Awesome! I loved this story.
| Saloni chapter 9 . 9/29/2013
I loved it.
| Saloni chapter 6 . 9/29/2013
Aww! So cute!
| Saloni chapter 4 . 9/29/2013
Brilliant! I loved the first meeting.
| Saloni chapter 2 . 9/29/2013
Great start ! I love it.
| Novella chapter 37 . 8/7/2013
Woop, finally finished! Thanks for the good read. I would normally leave behind a few points for constructive criticism but there really is nothing that I have not already said.
I do, however, have a few recommendations for you. I know you wrote this story a long while ago and your writing may very well have improved since then but I do suggest looking into perhaps incorporating more twists and drawing out the suspense a little more. That, and some careful proofreading, would make your stories perfect, I reckon. Try to be a little less predictable? :)
On the whole though, I really did enjoy this story - to the point that I have taken to procrastinate university homework in favour for reading this. I only wish Harrison had survived! To me, he was what made Kay‘s story a little more interesting as I am a shameless romantic. But the moment I suspected he had died, I went back to ignoring her sections altogether again (woops). Thanks again.
| Novella chapter 29 . 8/7/2013
Yes, finally! The main event! Anyway, it is going along fine so far. I still do not understand the M rating as you have a habit of leaving out the saucier adult content.
Other than that, I know this was... what, your third draft? Another revision is needed because thus far, I have seen you miss out parts where you forgot to rewrite Theodore for Thomas, and there are plenty of typos and grammatical mistakes here and there. Especially for words such as wrung and rung, too and to, than and then, distress FLARES not rockets. Honestly, I could point them all out myself but that would require me rereading. It is nothing a careful read-through would not fix though.
Also, another constructive criticism I have to say before I get back to reading the story is that some of your paragraphs unpleasantly resemble a wall of text. Perhaps think about breaking them down into sizeable chunks, if not for any other reason than to look pleasing to the eye.
| Novella chapter 14 . 8/6/2013
(I am really Of Sapphires and Quicksilver here on FP but,am too lazy to log in.) Anyway, I really like the interaction between Lili and Will so far. They are very interesting characters. I only wish you went into full detail when they consummated their marriage, hehe. Now I am wondering about the M rating, since you did not do so. As for Kay and Sean, I am sorry to say that I read their first section and they did not grab my attention or interest at all. I am sure you did not mean for that to happen, but I do find myself skipping over their parts and for that, I am sorry. I enjoy Lili and Will too much! xD