|Reviews for burning me alive|
| Creeping Collarbones chapter 1 . 5/6/2010
This has really great imagery. I liked the second stanza.
I enjoyed reading this. Nice piece.
| Isca chapter 1 . 6/15/2009
"Smoke rising into a clear sky." This line is brilliant. The speaker connects fire and burning to death-ultimately enhancing the imagery in this line to suggest that the smoke that's rising is really ashes.
"I can't look at you without feeling ripped apart." The tone of this line is phenomenal. It's amazing how much power a simple gaze can have over us. The speaker, perhaps, feels as though people are able to 'look within her' with just a glance-making her feel exposed, weak, and vulnerable.
Keep up the excellent work,
| Kate Marshall chapter 1 . 5/23/2009
You know, your a/n would've made a good summary. :D
Your imagery was very pretty. Very vivid. I had an amazing image in my head throughout the poem.
And I loved some of the half-rhymes and internal rhymes you put into this. They made this feel much more poetic and gave the poem a more definite flow.
-Peach/Kate, from the Review Marathon (link's in the profile!)
| Dani P chapter 1 . 5/13/2009
very nice, however i think the italics are unnecessary the piece would be just as strong...if not stronger without it.
other than that i like the image of the smoke rising.
| Disabled Account sdf chapter 1 . 5/13/2009
You got some very nice images here - good poem. Still, I might need some explanation before I really understand it!