|Reviews for The Demon Child|
| Koki Enwai chapter 1 . 8/14/2009
Really good. :)
As far as concrit goes, your other reviewer already pointed out the things that I was going to mention, so me just repeating them again would be a bit useless.
I like the idea, though. I kind of wish that you would continue it. Y'know, turn it into a non-one-shot. But yeah, that's just me.
| Phoenix Octavia Bright chapter 1 . 7/25/2009
It has a lot of potential to become a very intereting story but there are some things that you can work on in this story.
First: the sentences are too long. You should use dots and stuff like that when its appropiate, because its very confusing to read.
Second: You have some grammatical errors in your story. Maybe you should spell check the story, or maybe you should get a beta (they are very helpful).
Hope you wont take my critic the wrong way and use it to your advantage to improve your stories.