Woah, This sounds awesome! Did it ever get published? I REALLY wanna read it! Gosh, I sound like a little kid...lol I guess thats just the way I get when it comes to good writing... ]

-Kiri

Well, well, my young friend. This is a fine beginning.

I particularly enjoy your use of the English language. This is a well structured story and I'm looking forward to continuing my reading with the four chapters you've also published. It's unusual to encounter one of your age that is so well versed in the correct use of language and punctuation. Thank you for your efforts. I look forward to my continued reading.

Wayne

This was a good change, escaping reality. Can't wait to read the rest. D I hope it gets published.